Complex nightmares
With innuendos
Running through
Haunting metaphors
In sinuous dreams
Run anew
Primordial beliefs
Illogical paradigms
Ran yore
Creating communes
Of vernacular origin
Through scuttling syndromes
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- There is a magic in the air that permeates through the very soul of my existence. There is a stillness in the night that floods my senses beyond my imagination. There is a madness inside of me that overflows in everything that I create. There is a past behind me that is overcrowded with memories that drain me out.
32 comments:
this made my imagination reel. scuttling syndromes--wow.
Realistic.....Imaginary.
Creative word play~
sigh .. felt lik this last night..too much of this is happening to me lately.
Hi first time here ....
i had a dream last night, which remained with me, long after i had woken up. parts of it seemed desires and parts of it fears and some part didnt make much logical sense. reading this again, the middle two stanzas most of all, reminded me of it again.
this is has a haunting wise feel to it. it could have merely been clever but it has so much more to it. wow. ...scuttling syndromes... excellent work. bravo.
For some reason this brought to my mind moody b/w images of glass panes scattered in space at impossible angles through a black night..
Great stuff this :)
A wonderful specimen of controlled and skilled writing driven by a wealth of thought -- as usual.
It's amazing how some words seem inanimate when alone but resonate when together. Is it the words or the writer?!
Aptly titled.
Dang. Now this got me riveted, on the edge of my seat. I am very much impressed with the choice of words: "innuendos," "sinuous," and "Primordial."
I'm adding this to my faves of your works. Hee. ^_^
"Haunting metaphors
In sinuous dreams"
Makes me twinge in memory of what remained just that.
very fluid.
"Haunting metaphors
In sinuous dreams"
great line, great poem.
I've had a run of these over the past few nights. The sad truth is, if I were dealing better with things in broad daylight, my nights would be more peaceful.
Words are woven in waves of wisdom, A.
quot erat demonstratum
:) nice wordplay.
has a piquant charm...
but, i didn't quite understand "scuttling syndomes"... would you care to elucidate, in good interest?
-neeru
WOW, you painted beautifully with words. Each of those words is imaginative and perfect. This poem also flows really well. I like it's rhythm. I wouldn't change a thing here!
- Martin
I like this poem
very vivid in words
Renee
transience, Samudraa, musafir, Soulless, Itineranting, Lorena, Melchizedek, Avik, luz de la luna - Thanks. Glad you liked it.
Grafxgurl, Poems and Writings - Thanks for dropping by and commenting. Look forward to seeing you again.
gulnaz - Thanks a lot for your words and for sharing your experience.
Pincushion - Welcome back! Interesting perspective.
Potted-flower - Have a good break. We'll be waiting. :-)
mermaid - Hope things get better. Love the last line of your comment, "Words are woven in waves of wisdom"
neeru - Thanks. I prefer not to elucidate but to let readers take back what they want from the writing.
stark use of words...powerful
very nice.
jaded, teleute - Thanks!
i read this one many times...baffled me at first ;)
I like that I had to read it more than twice to get it--those are the best kind. Or maybe I am just slow : )
Are...this is nice...but act.Act.
where do you pick these words..strong play of words..enjoyed it.
Now this I like. Nice... I mean seriously love it. Very very cool. I'm being rapturous here... even if the words are limited to nice and cool..
Yeah. Melikes.
too many emotions expressed in too few words...but they all drive in one direction...at least that what it seems to me..there is a longing in there somewhere!
Yes, the "scuttling syndrome" line also kind of jolted me out of the rest of it. But then Transience liked it. Guess that's one of the things about poetry: there's that subjective element, and the writer finally has to decide what seems to work best.
Poison, Pecos Blue, Sudarshan - :-)
Apoplexy - Thanks for dropping by but I didn't quite get your comment. Do you mind explaining?
Ram, Mystique - Thanks.
Phal - It's okay. I am limited to 'thanks' most of the time! :-)
thinkpad - Thanks for dropping by and commenting.
Paul - Guess it is.
I love the fluidity of this piece. Especially, I like the repeated soft "s" sounds in the first two stanzas: "nightmareS," "innuendoS," "metaphorS," SinoUS," dreamS." The effect is soothing.
Then, you shift into a more varied form of alliteration. Repeated P's. "Primordial" and "Paradigms."
Then, repeated C's and S's. "Creating," "CommuneS," VernaCular," SCuttling," and "SyndromeS."
Combined with the fluid, apt language, the effect is stunning. Bravo!
Anonymous Poet - Thanks a lot. Rare to see someone pick out the rhythms of C's and S's in poems. You have a very keen eye!
Evoking, and provoking...
as usual.
Wonderfully written, A.
I missed you.
Zee - Thanks and welcome back!
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