Thursday, July 21, 2005

Lingua franca

Complex nightmares
With innuendos
Running through

Haunting metaphors
In sinuous dreams
Run anew

Primordial beliefs
Illogical paradigms
Ran yore

Creating communes
Of vernacular origin
Through scuttling syndromes


36 comments:

transience said...

this made my imagination reel. scuttling syndromes--wow.

Samudraa said...

Realistic.....Imaginary.

Creative word play~

Grafxgurl said...

sigh .. felt lik this last night..too much of this is happening to me lately.

Hi first time here ....

gulnaz said...

i had a dream last night, which remained with me, long after i had woken up. parts of it seemed desires and parts of it fears and some part didnt make much logical sense. reading this again, the middle two stanzas most of all, reminded me of it again.

this is has a haunting wise feel to it. it could have merely been clever but it has so much more to it. wow. ...scuttling syndromes... excellent work. bravo.

Pincushion said...

For some reason this brought to my mind moody b/w images of glass panes scattered in space at impossible angles through a black night..
Great stuff this :)

musafir said...
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musafir said...

A wonderful specimen of controlled and skilled writing driven by a wealth of thought -- as usual.

It's amazing how some words seem inanimate when alone but resonate when together. Is it the words or the writer?!

Aptly titled.

_Soulless_ said...

Dang. Now this got me riveted, on the edge of my seat. I am very much impressed with the choice of words: "innuendos," "sinuous," and "Primordial."

I'm adding this to my faves of your works. Hee. ^_^

Itineranting said...

"Haunting metaphors
In sinuous dreams"
Makes me twinge in memory of what remained just that.

Lorena said...

very fluid.

"Haunting metaphors
In sinuous dreams"
great line, great poem.

Potted-flower said...

really brings to life how complicated and how much grammar sucks. Or does it?

sorry to leave

potted-flower

mermaid said...

I've had a run of these over the past few nights. The sad truth is, if I were dealing better with things in broad daylight, my nights would be more peaceful.

Words are woven in waves of wisdom, A.

A Hairy Snail said...

quot erat demonstratum

:) nice wordplay.

Anonymous said...

has a piquant charm...

but, i didn't quite understand "scuttling syndomes"... would you care to elucidate, in good interest?

-neeru

nin said...

again a nice one...as usual...

luz de la luna said...

WOW, you painted beautifully with words. Each of those words is imaginative and perfect. This poem also flows really well. I like it's rhythm. I wouldn't change a thing here!

- Martin

Renee Wagemans said...

I like this poem
very vivid in words

Renee

. : A : . said...

transience, Samudraa, musafir, Soulless, Itineranting, Lorena, Melchizedek, Avik, luz de la luna - Thanks. Glad you liked it.

Grafxgurl, Poems and Writings - Thanks for dropping by and commenting. Look forward to seeing you again.

gulnaz - Thanks a lot for your words and for sharing your experience.

Pincushion - Welcome back! Interesting perspective.

Potted-flower - Have a good break. We'll be waiting. :-)

mermaid - Hope things get better. Love the last line of your comment, "Words are woven in waves of wisdom"

neeru - Thanks. I prefer not to elucidate but to let readers take back what they want from the writing.

jaded said...

stark use of words...powerful

Teleute said...

very nice.

. : A : . said...

jaded, teleute - Thanks!

>|' ; '| said...

i read this one many times...baffled me at first ;)

Pecos Blue said...

I like that I had to read it more than twice to get it--those are the best kind. Or maybe I am just slow : )

Apoplexy said...

Are...this is nice...but act.Act.

Ram said...

where do you pick these words..strong play of words..enjoyed it.

Phal said...

Now this I like. Nice... I mean seriously love it. Very very cool. I'm being rapturous here... even if the words are limited to nice and cool..

Yeah. Melikes.

thinkpad said...

too many emotions expressed in too few words...but they all drive in one direction...at least that what it seems to me..there is a longing in there somewhere!

Paul said...
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Paul said...

Yes, the "scuttling syndrome" line also kind of jolted me out of the rest of it. But then Transience liked it. Guess that's one of the things about poetry: there's that subjective element, and the writer finally has to decide what seems to work best.

Mystique said...

Very wise, and a nice play of words. Loved it.

Sudarshan said...

.:A:., :)

. : A : . said...

Poison, Pecos Blue, Sudarshan - :-)

Apoplexy - Thanks for dropping by but I didn't quite get your comment. Do you mind explaining?

Ram, Mystique - Thanks.

Phal - It's okay. I am limited to 'thanks' most of the time! :-)

thinkpad - Thanks for dropping by and commenting.

Paul - Guess it is.

Anonymous Poet said...

I love the fluidity of this piece. Especially, I like the repeated soft "s" sounds in the first two stanzas: "nightmareS," "innuendoS," "metaphorS," SinoUS," dreamS." The effect is soothing.

Then, you shift into a more varied form of alliteration. Repeated P's. "Primordial" and "Paradigms."

Then, repeated C's and S's. "Creating," "CommuneS," VernaCular," SCuttling," and "SyndromeS."

Combined with the fluid, apt language, the effect is stunning. Bravo!

. : A : . said...

Anonymous Poet - Thanks a lot. Rare to see someone pick out the rhythms of C's and S's in poems. You have a very keen eye!

Zee said...

Evoking, and provoking...
as usual.

Wonderfully written, A.

I missed you.

. : A : . said...

Zee - Thanks and welcome back!