tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post112199673258986899..comments2023-09-13T19:01:07.829+08:00Comments on Inside, Memories: Lingua franca. : A : .http://www.blogger.com/profile/04410256917258728976noreply@blogger.comBlogger32125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122649405606938822005-07-29T23:03:00.000+08:002005-07-29T23:03:00.000+08:00Zee - Thanks and welcome back!Zee - Thanks and welcome back!. : A : .https://www.blogger.com/profile/04410256917258728976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122604620022546092005-07-29T10:37:00.000+08:002005-07-29T10:37:00.000+08:00Evoking, and provoking...as usual.Wonderfully writ...Evoking, and provoking...<BR/>as usual.<BR/><BR/>Wonderfully written, A.<BR/><BR/>I missed you.Zeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00584122816525531204noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122593731151367152005-07-29T07:35:00.000+08:002005-07-29T07:35:00.000+08:00Anonymous Poet - Thanks a lot. Rare to see someone...Anonymous Poet - Thanks a lot. Rare to see someone pick out the rhythms of C's and S's in poems. You have a very keen eye!. : A : .https://www.blogger.com/profile/04410256917258728976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122428958687778292005-07-27T09:49:00.000+08:002005-07-27T09:49:00.000+08:00I love the fluidity of this piece. Especially, I ...I love the fluidity of this piece. Especially, I like the repeated soft "s" sounds in the first two stanzas: "nightmareS," "innuendoS," "metaphorS," SinoUS," dreamS." The effect is soothing.<BR/><BR/>Then, you shift into a more varied form of alliteration. Repeated P's. "Primordial" and "Paradigms."<BR/><BR/>Then, repeated C's and S's. "Creating," "CommuneS," VernaCular," SCuttling," and "SyndromeS."<BR/><BR/>Combined with the fluid, apt language, the effect is stunning. Bravo!Anonymous Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12259024805878478537noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122385633133569202005-07-26T21:47:00.000+08:002005-07-26T21:47:00.000+08:00Poison, Pecos Blue, Sudarshan - :-)Apoplexy - Than...Poison, Pecos Blue, Sudarshan - :-)<BR/><BR/>Apoplexy - Thanks for dropping by but I didn't quite get your comment. Do you mind explaining?<BR/><BR/>Ram, Mystique - Thanks.<BR/><BR/>Phal - It's okay. I am limited to 'thanks' most of the time! :-)<BR/><BR/>thinkpad - Thanks for dropping by and commenting.<BR/><BR/>Paul - Guess it is.. : A : .https://www.blogger.com/profile/04410256917258728976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122321020828952642005-07-26T03:50:00.000+08:002005-07-26T03:50:00.000+08:00Yes, the "scuttling syndrome" line also kind of jo...Yes, the "scuttling syndrome" line also kind of jolted me out of the rest of it. But then Transience liked it. Guess that's one of the things about poetry: there's that subjective element, and the writer finally has to decide what seems to work best.Paulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14770384445526387065noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122320736689474622005-07-26T03:45:00.000+08:002005-07-26T03:45:00.000+08:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Paulhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14770384445526387065noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122285809605556952005-07-25T18:03:00.000+08:002005-07-25T18:03:00.000+08:00too many emotions expressed in too few words...but...too many emotions expressed in too few words...but they all drive in one direction...at least that what it seems to me..there is a longing in there somewhere!thinkpad_84https://www.blogger.com/profile/03631738396392106755noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122277928749611292005-07-25T15:52:00.000+08:002005-07-25T15:52:00.000+08:00Now this I like. Nice... I mean seriously love it....Now this I like. Nice... I mean seriously love it. Very very cool. I'm being rapturous here... even if the words are limited to nice and cool..<BR/><BR/>Yeah. Melikes.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122271863432726162005-07-25T14:11:00.000+08:002005-07-25T14:11:00.000+08:00where do you pick these words..strong play of word...where do you pick these words..strong play of words..enjoyed it.Ramhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00364052729537484312noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122226541998587812005-07-25T01:35:00.000+08:002005-07-25T01:35:00.000+08:00Are...this is nice...but act.Act.Are...this is nice...but act.Act.Apoplexyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14478330329090145752noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122218112057979752005-07-24T23:15:00.000+08:002005-07-24T23:15:00.000+08:00I like that I had to read it more than twice to ge...I like that I had to read it more than twice to get it--those are the best kind. Or maybe I am just slow : )Pecos Bluehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16953945367943890844noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122217816076167712005-07-24T23:10:00.000+08:002005-07-24T23:10:00.000+08:00i read this one many times...baffled me at first ;...i read this one many times...baffled me at first ;)-Poison-https://www.blogger.com/profile/16369562525527820769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122214341029338082005-07-24T22:12:00.000+08:002005-07-24T22:12:00.000+08:00jaded, teleute - Thanks!jaded, teleute - Thanks!. : A : .https://www.blogger.com/profile/04410256917258728976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122212040472465442005-07-24T21:34:00.000+08:002005-07-24T21:34:00.000+08:00very nice.very nice.Teleutehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00583628336404295422noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122177959911858392005-07-24T12:05:00.000+08:002005-07-24T12:05:00.000+08:00stark use of words...powerfulstark use of words...powerfuljadedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03900872403414564447noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122169409211561452005-07-24T09:43:00.000+08:002005-07-24T09:43:00.000+08:00transience, Samudraa, musafir, Soulless, Itinerant...transience, Samudraa, musafir, Soulless, Itineranting, Lorena, Melchizedek, Avik, luz de la luna - Thanks. Glad you liked it.<BR/><BR/>Grafxgurl, Poems and Writings - Thanks for dropping by and commenting. Look forward to seeing you again.<BR/><BR/>gulnaz - Thanks a lot for your words and for sharing your experience.<BR/><BR/>Pincushion - Welcome back! Interesting perspective.<BR/><BR/>Potted-flower - Have a good break. We'll be waiting. :-)<BR/><BR/>mermaid - Hope things get better. Love the last line of your comment, "Words are woven in waves of wisdom"<BR/><BR/>neeru - Thanks. I prefer not to elucidate but to let readers take back what they want from the writing.. : A : .https://www.blogger.com/profile/04410256917258728976noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122157332592078102005-07-24T06:22:00.000+08:002005-07-24T06:22:00.000+08:00I like this poemvery vivid in wordsReneeI like this poem<BR/>very vivid in words<BR/><BR/>ReneeRenee Wagemanshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07822300985311017250noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122130094309092342005-07-23T22:48:00.000+08:002005-07-23T22:48:00.000+08:00WOW, you painted beautifully with words. Each of t...WOW, you painted beautifully with words. Each of those words is imaginative and perfect. This poem also flows really well. I like it's rhythm. I wouldn't change a thing here!<BR/><BR/>- MartinMartinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18179746436043287563noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122125371844636672005-07-23T21:29:00.000+08:002005-07-23T21:29:00.000+08:00has a piquant charm...but, i didn't quite understa...has a piquant charm...<BR/><BR/>but, i didn't quite understand "scuttling syndomes"... would you care to elucidate, in good interest?<BR/><BR/>-neeruAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122090308641824522005-07-23T11:45:00.000+08:002005-07-23T11:45:00.000+08:00quot erat demonstratum:) nice wordplay.<I>quot erat demonstratum</I><BR/><BR/>:) nice wordplay.Arindamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17257535549229236219noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122065309440509152005-07-23T04:48:00.000+08:002005-07-23T04:48:00.000+08:00I've had a run of these over the past few nights. ...I've had a run of these over the past few nights. The sad truth is, if I were dealing better with things in broad daylight, my nights would be more peaceful.<BR/><BR/>Words are woven in waves of wisdom, A.mermaidhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15895749686844178804noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122045685608362282005-07-22T23:21:00.000+08:002005-07-22T23:21:00.000+08:00very fluid. "Haunting metaphors In sinuous dreams"...very fluid. <BR/><BR/>"Haunting metaphors <BR/>In sinuous dreams"<BR/>great line, great poem.Lorenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07167719280821161695noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122041123319861252005-07-22T22:05:00.000+08:002005-07-22T22:05:00.000+08:00"Haunting metaphors In sinuous dreams"Makes me twi..."Haunting metaphors <BR/>In sinuous dreams"<BR/>Makes me twinge in memory of what remained just that.Itinerantinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12523751022657898880noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7999695.post-1122033730416800682005-07-22T20:02:00.000+08:002005-07-22T20:02:00.000+08:00Dang. Now this got me riveted, on the edge of my s...Dang. Now this got me riveted, on the edge of my seat. I am very much impressed with the choice of words: "innuendos," "sinuous," and "Primordial."<BR/><BR/>I'm adding this to my faves of your works. Hee. ^_^S.L. 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