Tuesday, January 04, 2005

Train of thoughts

It was over now.

As he looked at the moving railway tracks, he thought of all that had passed in the past few days. It had been like living in a dream within a dream. He had never imagined that it would have been like this.

The chatter of the people around her floated past him. He was staring at the tracks and was hypnotised by them. A million thoughts went through his head; but they were all about what had happened over the last couple of weeks. He was a different person now.

His thoughts carried him back to the night when they were running down the path in the middle of the night. He remembered the scampering and the winding path, where they stopped midway because they realised that there was no one behind them.

* * *

She remembered the scampering and the winding path, where they stopped midway because they realised that there was no one behind them. Her thoughts carried her back to the night when they were running down the path in the middle of the night.

She was a different person now. A million thoughts went through her head; but they were all about what had happened over the last couple of weeks. She was staring at the tracks and was hypnotised by them. The chatter of the people around him floated past her.

She had never imagined that it would have been like this. It had been like living in a dream within a dream. As she looked at the moving railway tracks, she thought of all that had passed in the past few days.

It was over now.


15 comments:

:..M..: said...

Oh my god. This is just beautiful and..solemn.

Cori said...

Both sides of the tracks. A great read as always. :)

Ubermensch said...

hmmm,seems u have specialised in this! keep them coming!

livinghigh said...

.... and it all gets tied up!
;-) great work, buddy.. the image i saw before me was a lovely entangled DNA double helix which lopos and knots and comes out again, one on either side.

Miss Qt said...

Nice story.I find it very interesting when you write this way. I had never seen this style before. It's cool! :)

the still dancer said...

The technique's a pleasant surprise. What do we call this, "mirrored stream of consciousness?"

Zee said...

Excellent work. I'm loving your technique and play on POV's.

Jessica said...

Amazing use of words. The reverse perspective is well achieved. WOW

. : A : . said...

:..M..:, Cori, Jessica - Thanks for your lovely comments.

ubermensch, Queen Mo, Zee - Yes, I enjoy this style.

livinghigh - Interesting perspective. I like!

kaashyapeya - Have not thought of a name for the technique yet. There are several earlier posts similar to this, if you go through the archives.

Pincushion said...

Its almost as if the genders don't matter...
as always a great read !! Thank you.

the still dancer said...

There's something that I want to say about this particular bit or writing, something in particular that it brings to mind, but I can't put a finger to exactly what it is. I know how stupid that sounds, but I thought I'd say it none the less. Will think very hard :) and come out with a proper response. Intriguing, intriguing.

Nishit Rawat said...

wow!

. : A : . said...

Pincushion - Thanks. Yes, this one was more similar perspectives than the earlier ones, though with a different chain of thoughts.

kaashyapeya - Don't worry, makes sense to me! If you manage to put a finger on it, do let me know.

Nishit Rawat - Thanks for dropping by and commenting. Looking forward to seeing you around.

Oneway said...

Beautiful; makes me feel wistful. Thank you.

. : A : . said...

oneway - Thanks. Do drop by again.