A moment ago
We were here
We were here
A moment later
They were gone
Again
Two perspectives
Coming together
In a new
Light
Coming together
In a new
Light
The dawn
Whispering through
Towards us
And our
Dreams
The genesis
Of a moment
Born untaught
And captured
For eternity
And a second
Of a moment
Born untaught
And captured
For eternity
And a second
42 comments:
Spatial perspectives and relative topology are magnified in our dreams. And the moments of such higher realisation are forever sketched in the pysche.
On a mundane level, the dreams we have nearing dawn are the most potent. I relish that time of my day like no other......
Great concept! Love the opposing language.
"born
untaught"
Two words that capture the entry into life and into the moment so well.
awesome composition, both written and visual. excellent!
Not sure if i could comprehend the entire composition but loved these lines -
Born untaught
And captured
For eternity
And a second
Like the apt composition. Clever.
Where's the picture to go with this!!! This is nice...
The irony and symmetry of a new beginning...
The minimlist style is quite complex...
NEAT!
:)
The moment takes us from here to there
shifting and carrying from one point to another
A wind that sweeps us
Once here
Then we find our selves in another direction
loved it
Nasra
Clever formatting to match the effect of the words. We likey :)
another creative post. you always have something exciting to read. it's a treat coming to visit you :)
you speak my language of moments.
Good juxtaposition.
Very very nice!
Aloha always
cyclic,
aren't most things,
most of us?
yet,
every moment
darts in different tangent
cyclic, at any given time...
:)
the genesis of an untaught moment, is born in the one secodn where perspective dawns...i just wish one cd hear the whispers!
like the contrasts...
dawn and dreams
eternity and a second
Beautifully written, especially:
"The genesis
Of a moment
Born untaught
And captured
For eternity
And a second"
Interesting overlapping perspectives - in this one and the morning post.
Not sure I comprehend what you mean by this :
And captured
For eternity
And a second
Eternity or second? Or a second more than eternity, like an hour and a half?
a moment born through you but you are captured in that one moment for eternity...those are the turning moments of our lives.
excellent stuff!
Hmm, I'm not that well-schooled in the art of poetry so could you please tell me what splitting the stanzas into left and right alignment does? =P
hi
visiting after a long time. nothing has changed, ur poetry BRILLIANT as usual.
"For Eternity
And a second"
:-)
Eloquent, philosophical, intelligent simplicity housing complexity in an aeasthetic format.
I like poems that elicit deep thinking with such ease. MMMMM!
hi...i am heree for the first time....n this is really a good blog to read.......adding u to my blogroll
Really left me guessing..Do you mean some of life's fleeting moments are eternal?
tou·ché
wonderful!!!...captured for eternity and a second...beautiful!!!
awesome post!! love how you wrote!!
Clever composition, A.
Genesis: "born untaught", of new beginnings and fresh starts and clean slates.......and everything in between and towards the end = experiences and lessons that mold and hold every mystery that goes into "it".
'eternity and a second'
such a beautiful summary of all that is. your poems and writing are like that. Great thought and concept of Genesis too.
buddy that was awesome... reminds me of a one-liner - 'I was born intelligent ... education ruined me' ...
loved the way youve done up this place and your pictures are a visual treat...was just wondering that 'objects in the rearview mirror are closer than they appear' while you've put 'they appear closer than they actually are'...why did you put it so?
An intelligent presentation!!!
Drop by sumtime.
:)
AquaM
like the way you had presented the lines...the build up from one line to six lines has an effect of a drop becoming a downpour..
:A:
this is beautiful and very poetic
neat
poetic
life
Manish Chauhan, Ô¿Ô, Blue Athena, Phoenix, Cecilia, stella - Thanks for sharing your perspective.
jason evans, mermaid, Zee, thoughts, :..M..:, gypsynan, Nasra, Casablanca, Mrudula, shyloh, Brood Mode, Docs Dope, Shubhodeep Pal, gulnaz, SilverMoon, mysterygal, Rohit Talwar, aquamarine, Renee, yvaine - Thanks.
bluegreenflysplat - Thanks. A picture is not necessary all the time?
Lorena - Glad you could relate.
Manny, Docs Dope - Huh?
Geetanjali - Could be either or both. Just a poetic way of saying it. ;-)
Demi Goddezz, Abhishek, Kunal - Thanks for dropping by and commenting. Look forward to seeing you around.
Aristocrat - It does a couple of things. One, they can be read as two individual poems - the one on the left and the one on the right. You can also read it as one poem in sequence. Two, they progress in the number of lines per stanza - the first is one line, the second two lines and so forth. Hence the odd ones are on the left and the even ones on the right. There is some more to the form and structure but am sure this should answer what you were looking for.
KJ - Welcome back and thanks!
venkat - Yes, some are.
Aradhita, chaos - :-)
Ram - Glad you could pick it up. Thanks.
=D Thanks for answering August. And since you are on it, would you be as kind to tell me everything on your structure? Haha..I'm trying to work under the constraints of structure now since I usually does free form.
And sorry for the late reply, my exams are coming that's why. Been mugging of late..
Aristocrat - My pleasure. And best of luck for your exams.
Beginnings are the best, aren't they?
Anonymous Poet - Yes, they are - then anything can happen.
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