A broken relationship
Thorns pricking
Blemished shortcomings
Glimmering desires
Piercing through
And through
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- There is a magic in the air that permeates through the very soul of my existence. There is a stillness in the night that floods my senses beyond my imagination. There is a madness inside of me that overflows in everything that I create. There is a past behind me that is overcrowded with memories that drain me out.
48 comments:
very nice pic
Sometimes even after breaking away the feel of the chain remains for a very long time.. like a little bit of ur past sticking onto one of your grey cell... which also keeps affecting your future...
Ouch!
Haunting, well-captured. Especially, I like the line: "Blemished shortcomings." That seems to capture the point so well.
we break, but bits stay stuck on, like little scraps of torn cloth, on barbed wire fences, waving like flags in the passing winds of time
The words almost fitted a certain pattern..perhaps signifying the imperfection of life? But the finality of the last phrase "And through" gives one the feeling that there is no redemption for...hmm I can't figure it out.
Oh yeah, the exams. Thanks! Just finished two papers in two days. Three more to go.
I forgot to add, twas a very nice picture. Did you wait very long for it or was it coincidental that you were holding your camera? :)
I am not sure how to answer this one so I best not answer ha. Nice picture though.
moving words, amazing pic
wonderful picture
Can you take the wire and pierce the sky for more light? More out of a relationship, or turn disappointments into points of light and acceptance?
Anonymous - Thanks. Do drop a link if you come by again.
Aradhita, Prerona - Thanks for your perspective. Am sure many identify with this.
Anonymous Poet, shyloh, Shubhodeep, Φ - Thank you.
Aristocrat - Thanks for your thoughts. Hope the exams are going well. I was actually doing some thematic shooting when I got this. It was quite deliberate.
mermaid - Very interesting perspective, as usual.
i love this combination. you can feel the piercing effect.
i also love mermaids perspective :)
if we r really hurt then it stays forever...mayb the hurt wont but the memory of that hurt will linger...but we shud move past all that...all the happens,it happens for the best...beautiful pic as usual!!;-)
Hi!
M glad to have come across your blog. Your poem perfectly goes along with the picture. Actually many a times, certain images evoke poetic effusions (is this one such case?)
Reading thru this poem brought to my mind one that I myself had written a few weeks ago called Bittersweet Memories.
Hi!
M glad to have come across your blog. Your poem perfectly goes along with the picture. Actually many a times, certain images evoke poetic effusions (is this one such case?)
Reading thru this poem brought to my mind one that I myself had written a few weeks ago called Bittersweet Memories.
Maybe barbed on a sunset isnt really the best way to show what you wrote.
But then again, this isnt my blog.
"A broken relationship
thorns pricking"
Can u pick up the pieces of a relationship, again without having scars?
KJ
a broken relationship
shards prick
as we lean over
and pick up those pieces
still trying to see
the two of us
togther, back then...
:)
Does the Sun pierce the barbed wire, or does the barbed wire pierce the Sun? Very nice, 'A'....
The photo once again is blinding in it's colours. Beautiful.
great one, wish you had written lengthier one
Lorena, Anne - Thanks.
Vikram - Thanks for your comment. Glad you could relate to the lines.
mysterygal - Thanks for your thoughts and perspective.
vidyanjali - Thanks for dropping by and commenting. I looked for your poem "Bittersweet Memories" on your blog but could not find it anywhere. Do drop a link if you come by again.
De.vile - Thanks for sharing your point of view. I guess different people tend to see things differently.
KJ - It probably depends on the relationship it was.
Blue Athena - Thanks for sharing your words here.
Stormy Zephyr - Always two sides. :-)
Ubermensch - So do I but this is all that came to me
Just a classic example of putting thoughts that demand explanation at times into crisp words. concise and hitting. love it!
Succinct and strong at the beginning yet it seems unfinished? This didn't "pierce" me as much as so many of your other fabulous writings. Perhaps, it's just me hoping for more. (I'm not a critic and I hesistate to say what I wrote, but I know I want honest feedback on my work, so I probably missed something?
Your golden photo is cool and highlights your words.
This made me cry, A!
I remember there was once a time I felt exactly that way.
You have a way of evoking so many thoughts with so few words... amazing...
all i can say is.........words brittle with sorrow....
That is really painful.
Nice picture, crappy lines.
as it piercing thoughts werent enuff....u had to put them in haunting words.........
"awesome" dosent sound good enuff.
and still there's hope!... hope for life...
atleast the pic says so...
Although the words are sad, the brightness of the sky just livened up my day! The yellow-chrome feel... makes me feel all sunny and cheery. Thanks :)
Rohit Talwar - Glad you do!
Green-Eyed Lady, Sushmit - Thanks for the critique. Agree with you. I had also hoped to write more, but more did not come to me so I stopped there. Appreciate the honest feedback.
Zee - Sorry that it made you cry, glad that you could relate.
Ô¿Ô - Thank you.
shooting star - Thanks for your perspective.
Mrudula - Hope not too much.
Deez - "Thank you" does not sound grateful enough.
chaos - It does.
Casablanca - Glad it brightened up your day.
A picture is worth thousand words,
and sometimes a few words worth thousand pictures...your picture and words qualify for both.
Anamika - Thanks so much.
piercing barbed wire. so apt for a broken relationship. it evokes a solid, hurtful separation. great pic too! did you take it yourself?
Hi August,
Yeah, a barbed wire it is...
a sweet pain perhaps???
AquaM
Am late - and as usual, everyone's grabbed my lines! :-)
The title and pic -awesome! The poetry added the few words that made it mean so much! Must echo Ubermensch about the length but do understand you too. Lovely one, A.
Abaniko - Thanks for dropping by and sharing your perspective. Yes, I did take the picture.
aquamarine - Perhaps.
Extempore - Thank you. No such thing as too late. :-)
That's how it certainly feels...a piercing of an already battered heart.
this one hurts.
in a way worse than u can fathom!
Cecilia - Thanks for your perspective.
Phoenix - Sorry to hear that.
Beautiful picture!
Rabbit proof fence was the first thing that came to mind! No particular reason really..
ahh. it's like the pain of holding on and letting go... great poem.
Chaos - I can see why. Thanks for dropping by here.
stella - Thanks.
The brevity of this piece added to power of the parallel effect of elements in life -risk/want/need/pain/courage/protection/resilience etc.
'Thorns pricking
Blemished shortcomings'
Strong!
Glimmering desires piercing through our very being! ah! It couldn't have been better!
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