Saturday, November 19, 2005

Piercing through

Barbed wire
A broken relationship
Thorns pricking
Blemished shortcomings
Glimmering desires
Piercing through
And through



50 comments:

Anonymous said...

very nice pic

Aradhita said...

Sometimes even after breaking away the feel of the chain remains for a very long time.. like a little bit of ur past sticking onto one of your grey cell... which also keeps affecting your future...

Anonymous Poet said...

Ouch!

Haunting, well-captured. Especially, I like the line: "Blemished shortcomings." That seems to capture the point so well.

Prerona said...

we break, but bits stay stuck on, like little scraps of torn cloth, on barbed wire fences, waving like flags in the passing winds of time

Aristocrat said...

The words almost fitted a certain pattern..perhaps signifying the imperfection of life? But the finality of the last phrase "And through" gives one the feeling that there is no redemption for...hmm I can't figure it out.

Oh yeah, the exams. Thanks! Just finished two papers in two days. Three more to go.

Aristocrat said...

I forgot to add, twas a very nice picture. Did you wait very long for it or was it coincidental that you were holding your camera? :)

shyloh said...
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shyloh said...

I am not sure how to answer this one so I best not answer ha. Nice picture though.

Shubhodeep said...

moving words, amazing pic

Φ said...

wonderful picture

mermaid said...

Can you take the wire and pierce the sky for more light? More out of a relationship, or turn disappointments into points of light and acceptance?

. : A : . said...

Anonymous - Thanks. Do drop a link if you come by again.

Aradhita, Prerona - Thanks for your perspective. Am sure many identify with this.

Anonymous Poet, shyloh, Shubhodeep, Φ - Thank you.

Aristocrat - Thanks for your thoughts. Hope the exams are going well. I was actually doing some thematic shooting when I got this. It was quite deliberate.

mermaid - Very interesting perspective, as usual.

Lorena said...

i love this combination. you can feel the piercing effect.

i also love mermaids perspective :)

Vikram said...

Wonderful lines man. I had been a silent reader until now. I so relate to them:).

Dreamy Eyed Gal said...

if we r really hurt then it stays forever...mayb the hurt wont but the memory of that hurt will linger...but we shud move past all that...all the happens,it happens for the best...beautiful pic as usual!!;-)

vidyanjali said...

Hi!

M glad to have come across your blog. Your poem perfectly goes along with the picture. Actually many a times, certain images evoke poetic effusions (is this one such case?)

Reading thru this poem brought to my mind one that I myself had written a few weeks ago called Bittersweet Memories.

vidyanjali said...

Hi!

M glad to have come across your blog. Your poem perfectly goes along with the picture. Actually many a times, certain images evoke poetic effusions (is this one such case?)

Reading thru this poem brought to my mind one that I myself had written a few weeks ago called Bittersweet Memories.

De.vile said...

Maybe barbed on a sunset isnt really the best way to show what you wrote.

But then again, this isnt my blog.

KJ said...

"A broken relationship
thorns pricking"

Can u pick up the pieces of a relationship, again without having scars?

KJ

Blue Athena said...

a broken relationship
shards prick
as we lean over
and pick up those pieces
still trying to see
the two of us
togther, back then...

:)

Stormy Zephyr said...

Does the Sun pierce the barbed wire, or does the barbed wire pierce the Sun? Very nice, 'A'....

Anne said...

The photo once again is blinding in it's colours. Beautiful.

Ubermensch said...

great one, wish you had written lengthier one

. : A : . said...

Lorena, Anne - Thanks.

Vikram - Thanks for your comment. Glad you could relate to the lines.

mysterygal - Thanks for your thoughts and perspective.

vidyanjali - Thanks for dropping by and commenting. I looked for your poem "Bittersweet Memories" on your blog but could not find it anywhere. Do drop a link if you come by again.

De.vile - Thanks for sharing your point of view. I guess different people tend to see things differently.

KJ - It probably depends on the relationship it was.

Blue Athena - Thanks for sharing your words here.

Stormy Zephyr - Always two sides. :-)

Ubermensch - So do I but this is all that came to me

Rohit Talwar said...

Just a classic example of putting thoughts that demand explanation at times into crisp words. concise and hitting. love it!

Green-Eyed Lady(GEL) said...

Succinct and strong at the beginning yet it seems unfinished? This didn't "pierce" me as much as so many of your other fabulous writings. Perhaps, it's just me hoping for more. (I'm not a critic and I hesistate to say what I wrote, but I know I want honest feedback on my work, so I probably missed something?
Your golden photo is cool and highlights your words.

Zee said...

This made me cry, A!

I remember there was once a time I felt exactly that way.

bert moth said...

You have a way of evoking so many thoughts with so few words... amazing...

shooting star said...

all i can say is.........words brittle with sorrow....

Mrudula said...

That is really painful.

Anonymous said...

Nice picture, crappy lines.

Deez said...

as it piercing thoughts werent enuff....u had to put them in haunting words.........

"awesome" dosent sound good enuff.

chaos said...

and still there's hope!... hope for life...

atleast the pic says so...

Casablanca said...

Although the words are sad, the brightness of the sky just livened up my day! The yellow-chrome feel... makes me feel all sunny and cheery. Thanks :)

Sushmit said...

im being picky here but i like the previous ones better....

. : A : . said...

Rohit Talwar - Glad you do!

Green-Eyed Lady, Sushmit - Thanks for the critique. Agree with you. I had also hoped to write more, but more did not come to me so I stopped there. Appreciate the honest feedback.

Zee - Sorry that it made you cry, glad that you could relate.

Ô¿Ô - Thank you.

shooting star - Thanks for your perspective.

Mrudula - Hope not too much.

Deez - "Thank you" does not sound grateful enough.

chaos - It does.

Casablanca - Glad it brightened up your day.

Anamika said...

A picture is worth thousand words,
and sometimes a few words worth thousand pictures...your picture and words qualify for both.

. : A : . said...

Anamika - Thanks so much.

Abaniko said...

piercing barbed wire. so apt for a broken relationship. it evokes a solid, hurtful separation. great pic too! did you take it yourself?

aquamarine said...

Hi August,

Yeah, a barbed wire it is...

a sweet pain perhaps???

AquaM

Extempore said...

Am late - and as usual, everyone's grabbed my lines! :-)

The title and pic -awesome! The poetry added the few words that made it mean so much! Must echo Ubermensch about the length but do understand you too. Lovely one, A.

. : A : . said...

Abaniko - Thanks for dropping by and sharing your perspective. Yes, I did take the picture.

aquamarine - Perhaps.

Extempore - Thank you. No such thing as too late. :-)

Cecilia said...

That's how it certainly feels...a piercing of an already battered heart.

Phoenix said...

this one hurts.

in a way worse than u can fathom!

. : A : . said...

Cecilia - Thanks for your perspective.

Phoenix - Sorry to hear that.

Chaos said...

Beautiful picture!
Rabbit proof fence was the first thing that came to mind! No particular reason really..

stella said...

ahh. it's like the pain of holding on and letting go... great poem.

. : A : . said...

Chaos - I can see why. Thanks for dropping by here.

stella - Thanks.

Jackal said...

The brevity of this piece added to power of the parallel effect of elements in life -risk/want/need/pain/courage/protection/resilience etc.

'Thorns pricking
Blemished shortcomings'

Strong!

ishmi said...

Glimmering desires piercing through our very being! ah! It couldn't have been better!