Thursday, November 10, 2005

Genesis, again

It starts now

A moment ago
We were here

A moment later
They were gone
Again

Two perspectives
Coming together
In a new
Light

The dawn
Whispering through
Towards us
And our
Dreams

The genesis
Of a moment
Born untaught
And captured
For eternity
And a second


47 comments:

Manish Chauhan said...

Spatial perspectives and relative topology are magnified in our dreams. And the moments of such higher realisation are forever sketched in the pysche.
On a mundane level, the dreams we have nearing dawn are the most potent. I relish that time of my day like no other......

jason evans said...

Great concept! Love the opposing language.

mermaid said...

"born
untaught"

Two words that capture the entry into life and into the moment so well.

Zee said...

awesome composition, both written and visual. excellent!

thoughts said...

Not sure if i could comprehend the entire composition but loved these lines -
Born untaught
And captured
For eternity
And a second

:..M..: said...

Like the apt composition. Clever.

bluegreenflysplat said...

Where's the picture to go with this!!! This is nice...

bert moth said...

The irony and symmetry of a new beginning...

The minimlist style is quite complex...

www.gypsynan.blogspot.com said...

NEAT!
:)

Anonymous said...

The moment takes us from here to there
shifting and carrying from one point to another
A wind that sweeps us
Once here
Then we find our selves in another direction

loved it

Nasra

Casablanca said...

Clever formatting to match the effect of the words. We likey :)

Lorena said...

another creative post. you always have something exciting to read. it's a treat coming to visit you :)

you speak my language of moments.

Mrudula said...

Good juxtaposition.

shyloh said...

Very very nice!
Aloha always

Blue Athena said...

cyclic,
aren't most things,
most of us?

yet,
every moment
darts in different tangent

cyclic, at any given time...

:)

Phoenix said...

the genesis of an untaught moment, is born in the one secodn where perspective dawns...i just wish one cd hear the whispers!

Brood Mode said...

like the contrasts...

dawn and dreams
eternity and a second

Docs Dope said...

i like it

Doc

Shubhodeep said...

Beautifully written, especially:

"The genesis
Of a moment
Born untaught
And captured
For eternity
And a second"

Manny said...

right...

Geetanjali said...

Interesting overlapping perspectives - in this one and the morning post.

Not sure I comprehend what you mean by this :
And captured
For eternity
And a second

Eternity or second? Or a second more than eternity, like an hour and a half?

Demi Goddezz said...

nice....moments...dreams...

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gulnaz said...

a moment born through you but you are captured in that one moment for eternity...those are the turning moments of our lives.

excellent stuff!

Aristocrat said...

Hmm, I'm not that well-schooled in the art of poetry so could you please tell me what splitting the stanzas into left and right alignment does? =P

KJ said...

hi
visiting after a long time. nothing has changed, ur poetry BRILLIANT as usual.

"For Eternity
And a second"

:-)

SilverMoon said...

Eloquent, philosophical, intelligent simplicity housing complexity in an aeasthetic format.
I like poems that elicit deep thinking with such ease. MMMMM!

Abhishek said...

hi...i am heree for the first time....n this is really a good blog to read.......adding u to my blogroll

venkat said...

Really left me guessing..Do you mean some of life's fleeting moments are eternal?

Aradhita said...

tou·ché

Dreamy Eyed Gal said...

wonderful!!!...captured for eternity and a second...beautiful!!!

Rohit Talwar said...

awesome post!! love how you wrote!!

Cecilia said...

Clever composition, A.

Genesis: "born untaught", of new beginnings and fresh starts and clean slates.......and everything in between and towards the end = experiences and lessons that mold and hold every mystery that goes into "it".

stella said...

'eternity and a second'

such a beautiful summary of all that is. your poems and writing are like that. Great thought and concept of Genesis too.

chaos said...

buddy that was awesome... reminds me of a one-liner - 'I was born intelligent ... education ruined me' ...

Docs Dope said...

Everyone here seems to be too ruined, it is beyond stupidity to delve into such idioticisms....com'on all get out.. there are lot of girls out there waiting to have a good time...

Kunal said...

loved the way youve done up this place and your pictures are a visual treat...was just wondering that 'objects in the rearview mirror are closer than they appear' while you've put 'they appear closer than they actually are'...why did you put it so?

aquamarine said...

An intelligent presentation!!!
Drop by sumtime.

:)
AquaM

Ram said...

like the way you had presented the lines...the build up from one line to six lines has an effect of a drop becoming a downpour..

Renee Wagemans said...

:A:
this is beautiful and very poetic

Phoenix said...

neat
poetic
life

yvaine said...

Ah, beautiful. I love your device.

I love the hints of purity and possibility.

. : A : . said...

Manish Chauhan, Ô¿Ô, Blue Athena, Phoenix, Cecilia, stella - Thanks for sharing your perspective.

jason evans, mermaid, Zee, thoughts, :..M..:, gypsynan, Nasra, Casablanca, Mrudula, shyloh, Brood Mode, Docs Dope, Shubhodeep Pal, gulnaz, SilverMoon, mysterygal, Rohit Talwar, aquamarine, Renee, yvaine - Thanks.

bluegreenflysplat - Thanks. A picture is not necessary all the time?

Lorena - Glad you could relate.

Manny, Docs Dope - Huh?

Geetanjali - Could be either or both. Just a poetic way of saying it. ;-)

Demi Goddezz, Abhishek, Kunal - Thanks for dropping by and commenting. Look forward to seeing you around.

Aristocrat - It does a couple of things. One, they can be read as two individual poems - the one on the left and the one on the right. You can also read it as one poem in sequence. Two, they progress in the number of lines per stanza - the first is one line, the second two lines and so forth. Hence the odd ones are on the left and the even ones on the right. There is some more to the form and structure but am sure this should answer what you were looking for.

KJ - Welcome back and thanks!

venkat - Yes, some are.

Aradhita, chaos - :-)

Ram - Glad you could pick it up. Thanks.

Aristocrat said...

=D Thanks for answering August. And since you are on it, would you be as kind to tell me everything on your structure? Haha..I'm trying to work under the constraints of structure now since I usually does free form.

And sorry for the late reply, my exams are coming that's why. Been mugging of late..

. : A : . said...

Aristocrat - My pleasure. And best of luck for your exams.

Anonymous Poet said...

Beginnings are the best, aren't they?

. : A : . said...

Anonymous Poet - Yes, they are - then anything can happen.