All she can see is the storm coming.
The dark clouds settle over the horizon and lay in wait for their signal.
The thunder.
To mark the beginning of the onslaught.
The storm.
A flash of what could have been and what has been.
The lightning.
The music plays for her.
The storm is because of her.
But, there is no rain.
29 comments:
hey...really nice poem this...conjured up a load of emotions...non-decipherable, yet articulate, somehow...Cheers!!
do visit my blog again http://shubhodeep.blog-city.com
yea man poet. deep you dwell and higher.
oh very melodramatic!! i love it!
the anticipation. wonderful.
no rain, no tears?
This image reminded me of another similar (though les dramatically effective) on Hints Allegations... http://deepakg.blogspot.com/2005/05/its-raining.html
Loved the palampsestic decriptions in this one...a storm in a tea-cup, an emotional storm brewing up inside her to mirror the stormy weather outside her?
"The storm is beacuse of her.
But there is no rain."
Something waiting to happen...
whhoooaaaaa...oh i better shut up. i didnt understand this one, way too deep.
Fantastic!! absolutely fantastic!!
i almost took a pic today of raindrops on a car windscreen, but didnt...wasnt coming the way i wanted it. this was how i wanted it. thanks.
wow. the picture interspersed with the words was powerful.
Humidity. Thats what I see. And strange as this may sound, I got this feeling of claustrophobia from the photograph. I'm not an artist or photogrpaher so please excuse my crazy thoughts!!
even at the cost of being repetitive, i will say
" WOW"
KJ
Looks like rain to me...from the picture.
"A flash of what could have been and what has been"
an amazing way to look at lightning. loved the poem
After reading it twice, I tried reading the whole thing again erasing all the text in italics...
abra cadabra...
well you cast a spell.
shubhodeep - Thanks. I visited your blog but I can't seem to leave a comment there. Everytime I try, it says 'invalid comment'.
Billy, transience, KJ - Thanks.
Lorena - Thanks. Yes, tears and rain can be equated in this one.
Geetanjali - Will have a look at the blog. Glad you liked it.
mermaid - Yes, something waiting to happen.
Elixir - You can read it for what it is too. ;-)
gulnaz - Thanks. Glad you liked the pic.
Nicole Braganza - The beauty of art is that there are no crazy thoughts, and everyone sees what meaning they can derive from it. Humidity is fine. :-)
stan laurel - It is deceiving isn't it?
Brood Mode - Thanks. I quite liked it myself.
Kripa Shankar - Nice way of reading it! Now read only the text in italics this time.
jenn see - Not a bad idea. Maybe I will.
De ja vu. I feel like I've made the same comment on another post, haven't I?
i loved the writing too, you don't thank me for that ;)
i loved the writing too, you don't thank me for that ;)
Hi A, thanks for dropping by on my blog! Yes, the picture is indeed somewhat similar to one I had posted!
'But no rain...' Lovely, really foreboding. i wish i knew her
I guess I'm a bit late this time. Tried the suggestion you gave kripa shankar (and his idea too), and what can I say? - Brilliant!
mermaid - You might have. I think you have.
gulnaz - Thanks for that too! :-)
Deepak - Yes, it is. Thanks for dropping by.
Mriganayanii, musafir - Thanks.
this just took me straight back to the storm that rocked us a couple days ago. very nice.
hmm.. great post again... tho kindda reminds me of my post "tranced by the dark sound"... very intriguing. i certainly felt it was a stormy night the day i compiled that list... but there was no rain.
finnegan, Jessica, atomicvelvetsigh - Thanks.
Beautifully written!
Jyotsna - Thanks!
rebel_heart - Thanks a lot. I just write what I feel.
The thunder
The storm
The lightning
But there is no rain.
Raises your hopes...only to have you fall flat on your face.
Yet, isn't that a good thing? No rain! That which should have caused her tears...did not happen!
Joy - I guess it could be. Swings either way. :-)
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