Saturday, June 04, 2005

But, there is no rain

The music plays in the background.
All she can see is the storm coming.



The dark clouds settle over the horizon and lay in wait for their signal.
The thunder.

To mark the beginning of the onslaught.
The storm.

A flash of what could have been and what has been.
The lightning.


The music plays for her.
The storm is because of her.
But, there is no rain.


32 comments:

Shubhodeep said...

hey...really nice poem this...conjured up a load of emotions...non-decipherable, yet articulate, somehow...Cheers!!

do visit my blog again http://shubhodeep.blog-city.com

Billy said...

yea man poet. deep you dwell and higher.

Lorena said...

oh very melodramatic!! i love it!
the anticipation. wonderful.
no rain, no tears?

Geetanjali said...

This image reminded me of another similar (though les dramatically effective) on Hints Allegations... http://deepakg.blogspot.com/2005/05/its-raining.html

Loved the palampsestic decriptions in this one...a storm in a tea-cup, an emotional storm brewing up inside her to mirror the stormy weather outside her?

mermaid said...

"The storm is beacuse of her.
But there is no rain."

Something waiting to happen...

Elixir said...

whhoooaaaaa...oh i better shut up. i didnt understand this one, way too deep.

gulnaz said...

Fantastic!! absolutely fantastic!!

i almost took a pic today of raindrops on a car windscreen, but didnt...wasnt coming the way i wanted it. this was how i wanted it. thanks.

transience said...

wow. the picture interspersed with the words was powerful.

NicoleBraganza said...

Humidity. Thats what I see. And strange as this may sound, I got this feeling of claustrophobia from the photograph. I'm not an artist or photogrpaher so please excuse my crazy thoughts!!

KJ said...

even at the cost of being repetitive, i will say
" WOW"

KJ

stan laurel said...

Looks like rain to me...from the picture.

Brood Mode said...

"A flash of what could have been and what has been"

an amazing way to look at lightning. loved the poem

Kripa Shankar said...

After reading it twice, I tried reading the whole thing again erasing all the text in italics...
abra cadabra...
well you cast a spell.

jenn see said...

you should do a whole series of "there is no rain" pieces.

oddly enough, there's a thunderstorm rolling in at this very moment.

. : A : . said...

shubhodeep - Thanks. I visited your blog but I can't seem to leave a comment there. Everytime I try, it says 'invalid comment'.

Billy, transience, KJ - Thanks.

Lorena - Thanks. Yes, tears and rain can be equated in this one.

Geetanjali - Will have a look at the blog. Glad you liked it.

mermaid - Yes, something waiting to happen.

Elixir - You can read it for what it is too. ;-)

gulnaz - Thanks. Glad you liked the pic.

Nicole Braganza - The beauty of art is that there are no crazy thoughts, and everyone sees what meaning they can derive from it. Humidity is fine. :-)

stan laurel - It is deceiving isn't it?

Brood Mode - Thanks. I quite liked it myself.

Kripa Shankar - Nice way of reading it! Now read only the text in italics this time.

jenn see - Not a bad idea. Maybe I will.

mermaid said...

De ja vu. I feel like I've made the same comment on another post, haven't I?

gulnaz said...

i loved the writing too, you don't thank me for that ;)

gulnaz said...

i loved the writing too, you don't thank me for that ;)

Deepak said...

Hi A, thanks for dropping by on my blog! Yes, the picture is indeed somewhat similar to one I had posted!

Mriganayanii said...

'But no rain...' Lovely, really foreboding. i wish i knew her

musafir said...

I guess I'm a bit late this time. Tried the suggestion you gave kripa shankar (and his idea too), and what can I say? - Brilliant!

. : A : . said...

mermaid - You might have. I think you have.

gulnaz - Thanks for that too! :-)

Deepak - Yes, it is. Thanks for dropping by.

Mriganayanii, musafir - Thanks.

finnegan said...

Why do I visualise the 'she' in this poem as a cat?
Somehow the hairline sensitivity of a cat gives the expectancy much more of a static electrical charge.

Great stuff here .:A:.

Jessica said...

this just took me straight back to the storm that rocked us a couple days ago. very nice.

atomicvelvetsigh said...

hmm.. great post again... tho kindda reminds me of my post "tranced by the dark sound"... very intriguing. i certainly felt it was a stormy night the day i compiled that list... but there was no rain.

. : A : . said...

finnegan, Jessica, atomicvelvetsigh - Thanks.

Jyotsna said...

Beautifully written!

. : A : . said...

Jyotsna - Thanks!

Ladylullaby said...

how do you keep doing that?

everything you write is beautiful..

you're awesome

. : A : . said...

rebel_heart - Thanks a lot. I just write what I feel.

Joy said...

The thunder
The storm
The lightning

But there is no rain.

Raises your hopes...only to have you fall flat on your face.

Yet, isn't that a good thing? No rain! That which should have caused her tears...did not happen!

. : A : . said...

Joy - I guess it could be. Swings either way. :-)